Comments on: Scene From An Office http://corvus.zakelro.com/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/ hoc ludite quasi carmen Wed, 28 Jul 2010 21:10:11 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=abc By: Jeremy http://corvus.zakelro.com/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-63267 Jeremy Thu, 14 Jun 2007 18:55:27 +0000 http://blog.pjsattic.com/corvus/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-63267 Either a reversal - "I thought this was about the resignation letter I left on your desk!" or a "Who's On First" ending - a recapitulation of the phrases by the confused party, followed by a new twist-the end. I'd take out use of the phrase "fired" entirely and stick with "clean out your desk" - fired doesn't work, as you don't give any humorous way for it to be misunderstood, it can only be ignored - and Tim is less funny if he is simply ignoring everything he doesn't want to hear. Either a reversal – “I thought this was about the resignation letter I left on your desk!” or a “Who’s On First” ending – a recapitulation of the phrases by the confused party, followed by a new twist-the end.

I’d take out use of the phrase “fired” entirely and stick with “clean out your desk” – fired doesn’t work, as you don’t give any humorous way for it to be misunderstood, it can only be ignored – and Tim is less funny if he is simply ignoring everything he doesn’t want to hear.

]]> By: Undercrypt http://corvus.zakelro.com/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57259 Undercrypt Fri, 18 May 2007 15:02:31 +0000 http://blog.pjsattic.com/corvus/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57259 Frank: (pause) Tim, I’m afraid we’re terminating you. Tim: But you- (bang) Frank: (pause) Tim, I’m afraid we’re terminating you.

Tim: But you-

(bang)

]]> By: Kevin http://corvus.zakelro.com/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57206 Kevin Fri, 18 May 2007 09:24:44 +0000 http://blog.pjsattic.com/corvus/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57206 Leave it open as it is, with Frank giving a frustrated and discouraged stare while Tim walks away. The reader/watcher can easily make up what will happen next by himself. I think that's a funny ending as it is. :) Leave it open as it is, with Frank giving a frustrated and discouraged stare while Tim walks away. The reader/watcher can easily make up what will happen next by himself.

I think that’s a funny ending as it is. :)

]]> By: Eric von Rothkirch http://corvus.zakelro.com/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57093 Eric von Rothkirch Thu, 17 May 2007 19:54:00 +0000 http://blog.pjsattic.com/corvus/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57093 *Frank kills himself in outright frustration. *Tim comes back the next day, handing in his resignation. Frank argues that he can't quit when he's already been fired, and the whole thing starts over again but this time Frank is in Tim's shoes, 'misunderstanding' what Tim is talking about. *Some consultants come in and they actually like Tim's ideas the best... oh wait, somebody already told that story. :) *Frank kills himself in outright frustration.

*Tim comes back the next day, handing in his resignation. Frank argues that he can’t quit when he’s already been fired, and the whole thing starts over again but this time Frank is in Tim’s shoes, ‘misunderstanding’ what Tim is talking about.

*Some consultants come in and they actually like Tim’s ideas the best… oh wait, somebody already told that story. :)

]]> By: Josh http://corvus.zakelro.com/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57089 Josh Thu, 17 May 2007 19:24:20 +0000 http://blog.pjsattic.com/corvus/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57089 Maybe replace Tim's last line with - "Oh, c'mon Frank - it's not like I really worked much in this office in the first place., if you know what I mean. Mostly I was chewing gum and watching my belly lint. Why would anything change on Tuesday? God, Frank. You can be really dense sometimes. Maybe you should hit the gym or something." Maybe replace Tim’s last line with – “Oh, c’mon Frank – it’s not like I really worked much in this office in the first place., if you know what I mean. Mostly I was chewing gum and watching my belly lint. Why would anything change on Tuesday? God, Frank. You can be really dense sometimes. Maybe you should hit the gym or something.”

]]> By: Beagle http://corvus.zakelro.com/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57078 Beagle Thu, 17 May 2007 18:14:14 +0000 http://blog.pjsattic.com/corvus/2007/05/scene-from-an-office/#comment-57078 I think Frank should promote Tim to Frank's position, make him sit down in Frank's desk, and then Frank should plead to be fired by Tim so he can get out of the nut house that is his office. I think Frank should promote Tim to Frank’s position, make him sit down in Frank’s desk, and then Frank should plead to be fired by Tim so he can get out of the nut house that is his office.

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